tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post2801366225567165445..comments2019-01-28T06:41:47.359-05:00Comments on Wrasselings: Friday Fictioneers: "Day Trip"Cindy Marschhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15902687329094127050noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-72700079638411533532012-10-26T06:19:43.266-04:002012-10-26T06:19:43.266-04:00Thanks, Pete and Doug. Doug, I couldn't get &...Thanks, Pete and Doug. Doug, I couldn't get "Jefferson Starship" out of my head, and there was just something eerie about that bus to . . . where?Cindy Marschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15902687329094127050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-44970889032365064332012-10-22T05:22:17.421-04:002012-10-22T05:22:17.421-04:00Dear Cindy,
I love what you did with the dialog a...Dear Cindy,<br /><br />I love what you did with the dialog and accent. And the Jefferson Starship trip was a great riff on the photo prompt.<br /><br />Aloha,<br /><br />DougDouglas MacIlroyhttp://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-57270981025813283202012-10-20T05:21:05.279-04:002012-10-20T05:21:05.279-04:00I wanted to do a good southern accent for my bus d...I wanted to do a good southern accent for my bus driver but I knew that I wouldn't be able to carry it off so I didn't try. I certainly couldn't have done as well as your excellent dialect. Well done.Petehttp://www.writeondude.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-79177265386476906122012-10-19T23:12:03.955-04:002012-10-19T23:12:03.955-04:00Rich, I'm thinking "recollect" is pr...Rich, I'm thinking "recollect" is pretty much what I hear this character saying, but thanks for making me be really sure about it. Thanks to you, too, Lora, Scott, Anonymous, and Photo!Cindy Marschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15902687329094127050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-17884108099246812662012-10-19T23:05:57.186-04:002012-10-19T23:05:57.186-04:00Great job. I think changing recollect to reckon wo...Great job. I think changing recollect to reckon would sound even more buffoonish. I used the same person as the main character in mine.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-5001607674462662372012-10-19T22:29:26.825-04:002012-10-19T22:29:26.825-04:00because of how well the dialogue was written, i wa...because of how well the dialogue was written, i was forced to read it as slowly as the character is thinking it. i wonder if "recollect" should be "reckon."richnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-85784156546231014152012-10-19T21:23:25.098-04:002012-10-19T21:23:25.098-04:00Wonder if someone gave this gullible guy a bill of...Wonder if someone gave this gullible guy a bill of goods? No matter, he's on his way. Who knows... he may find ET. Enjoyed the dialect.Loranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-65494469734547893202012-10-19T18:38:16.796-04:002012-10-19T18:38:16.796-04:00Don't worry about making the fat guy the buffo...Don't worry about making the fat guy the buffoon. You don't actually know him so anyone you chose could be offended! lol<br />Dialect was excellent! I agree!<br />Thanks for stopping by my post.<br />ScottScotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12956629131894555121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-60746562783973620032012-10-19T11:04:26.279-04:002012-10-19T11:04:26.279-04:00Hi Cindy,
The character you create here is scary r...Hi Cindy,<br />The character you create here is scary real. I know this guy. Great job of capturing the dialect. I'd say more, but I have to go take another ride with the aliens! RonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-82235309037852582732012-10-19T10:06:05.686-04:002012-10-19T10:06:05.686-04:00Wow, y'all, I'm excited that you liked my ...Wow, y'all, I'm excited that you liked my dialect! I'm very nervous about speaking dialect or accents or in another language (French is the only candidate), because I'm not an "actor" by nature. But I could definitely hear this guy talking, and I edited over the spelling to be sure to convey only the ways in which he would deviate from standard spelling. I'm glad it worked!<br /><br />But I also feel a little guilty about making a fat guy a buffoon--hits too close to home! And I kinda think this guy is a sympathetic character, like Gomer Pyle, Janet! (But with a little regional difference.) :-)Cindy Marschhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15902687329094127050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-6941426957569016512012-10-19T07:48:38.184-04:002012-10-19T07:48:38.184-04:00Well done with the dialect.. though I can never ev...Well done with the dialect.. though I can never ever do it myself. Story very good as well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-49025517773219277992012-10-19T07:10:23.892-04:002012-10-19T07:10:23.892-04:00Goooolllleee, Sarge. :-). Ditto to Danny's co...Goooolllleee, Sarge. :-). Ditto to Danny's comments.janethttp://sustainabilitea.wordpress.com/2012/10/17/friday-fictioneers-forever-love/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-56804887243394787692012-10-19T04:56:45.105-04:002012-10-19T04:56:45.105-04:00I don't think I need to enlarge the picture to...I don't think I need to enlarge the picture to see your character. I can hear him and he's making my ears bleed. Good job! Rochelle Wisoff-Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00090374697915874481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-74904265900198190522012-10-19T04:23:42.871-04:002012-10-19T04:23:42.871-04:00Nice one Cindy, well done.Nice one Cindy, well done.Sandra Crookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00534491053812317718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8071531992275028215.post-66809113976105725842012-10-18T22:37:14.938-04:002012-10-18T22:37:14.938-04:00Nice dialect! I also like how you incorporated th...Nice dialect! I also like how you incorporated the name of the bus line in your story, and how your character completely misses the significance of what he's about to do.Danny Bowmanhttp://glossarch.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com