Friday, August 24, 2012

Friday Fictioneers: "Firmament"

This week's Friday Fictioneers has a photo that looks like where I live, and that's a start.  Please visit the link and try your own little piece of literature!


Firmament


Today we had our first taste of autumn in Pennsylvania as the fog filled the valleys in our fields, slowly-rolling little clouds creeping up to the house. The temperature gradients explain it, but it is ghostly.

A friend visiting Alaska this summer peered through her binoculars for Denali among the clouds. When she finally saw it she pulled her companions' sleeves, but they would not believe her. Finally they made out the peak, dark rock and bright snow above a little tuft of gray.

Little children run through the farm fog, secure on the familiar ground beneath their feet, waving arms wildly and spinning through the mists. But they'll shriek sure as anything if the dog suddenly muzzles them out of the white, or a tree looms.

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I have to share another photo, though, that my husband took of our own fields:


Twilight After a Rain




13 comments:

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Nice photo, Cindy. Very similar to Maggie's. I enjoyed the trip back to Alaska. Well written.
mine's here: http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2012/08/22/escape/

Reading Pleasure said...

A fine photo, similar to Maggie's; A fine story. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/08/23/fridayfictioneers-light-on-the-hill/

Anonymous said...

I have location envy! A lovely way to capture nature near and far, and how we respond to it. Seeking Denali, playing in the mists. Man I miss things like fog.

Thanks for visiting,
Kathy

Sandra Crook said...

Enjoyed the story and another nice photo.

Anonymous said...

Nicely done. Your picture is lovely as well! Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/08/23/flash-friday-fiction-13/

Ilyan Kei Lavanway said...

Great story, true to life. The mist is indeed ghostly.

http://ebooksscifi.wordpress.com/2012/08/24/devolution-copyright-2012-ilyan-kei-lavanway/

Anonymous said...

Looks like I need to move! I share the location-envy, the only thing that happens in the fog here is that the CN tower disappears from view across the valley!
I love the last paragraph - how very true about dogs and trees looming out of the haze.

Maggie said...

Very nice--and the photo wasn't taken that far away from Pennsylvania: the Shenandoah Valley.

Here's mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/pillar-of-salt/

janet said...

Cindy, I like how you got the three different riffs on the fog into your story and I, too, liked thinking about how the children would squeal.

billgncs said...

fine story, fine picture.

Cindy Marsch said...

Thanks, everyone, for your feedback. I've really enjoyed the three weeks I've been doing this. I think I've visited everyone's site to comment--lots of imagination out there! :-)

Unknown said...

A fellow Pennsylvaniaite (I'm officially coining that as a term if it hasn't yet been done) I see. I enjoyed your story and photo. I'd love to have a view like that, but for the time being, I'm a city boy.

Anonymous said...

My post for this photo was inspired by the PA landscape as well. This image could have been taken from the edge of a friend's property in the Endless Mountains (where evidence of the gas companies' activities abounds). Good description and lovely companion photo for Maggie's.
(http://vbreverb.wordpress.com/2012/08/23/progress/