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Oasis
Hard-baked, blinding white, chalky air, throbbing heat.
Where has she brought me, my archaeologist love? She promised Rome on the way,
just one day—we scattered pigeons on the square, craned our necks in the Pantheon
as rain misted down on us, and I gasped at the art.
Now in Tunisia it is only the oppressive heat, never
mind that it’s almost easy to kick up a Roman coin on one of the old roads. But
I have a plant on the roof, and I found a can of blue paint for the door, so I’m
sheltered here.
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11 comments:
That's how I felt when my love brought me to Texas! And there was no Rome on the way, either. Have you been to Tunisia? This story has the ring of truth, certainly.
"Hard-baked, blinding white, chalky air, throbbing heat." These words sum up the scene, and the lover's mood, so well.
Markets,I have friends who visited Tunisia a couple of years ago with another friend who is an archaeologist/historian, and I have made the trip vicariously through them. My dad once described the feel of the Pantheon in Rome, and my friends did pick up Roman coins on the road, but I think it might have been in Rome, actually! In Tunisia and other out-of-the-way places the ruins are more pristine, not such tourist traps.
Thank you, too, for your comment, Sarah!
Very real and well done! I love the first line. My sympathies are with this guy but there I'm sure there's plenty to see, although more than one day in Italy would have been nice.
Hi Cindy,
After our summer with 18 days or 100 or above temps, I can appreciate the need for shelter from the heat. Ron
Interesting story. Feels real. Tunisia is not a place I would want to live or visit (to find coins or dig for artifacts). I would fight to stay in Rome. Nice work.
He sounds happy enough with his lot; hope he stays that way. Nice one.
Could feel the heat. Put me in mind of visiting Solomon's mine in Israel. I stayed on the air-conditioned tour bus.
Good story, Cindy.
Ah... the things we do for love. But adventure comes in all manner of ways.
I enjoyed the images it paints.
Sacrifices are acceptable as long as we have protection from the evil eye by a blue door.
One day in Rome, that's very nice and so hard to beat...must be very hard to be in such a hot country. Mine is here
Have you a ROCKING AND BLESSED WEEK!!!
hugs
shakira
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