Thursday, November 15, 2012

Friday Fictioneers: "Just Like Candy!"



This week's entry into Friday Fictioneers isn't terribly inspired, but it will do. Sometime's it's just like that, you know? Please join us!



Just Like Candy!

“Oh, Sweetie, know what you can do with those?  You can stack them just like this –“  She began rolling the towels into logs and inserting them into the closet according to hue.  “And then we’ll go out here—“ she clomped out into the living room in her cherry-red high heels, thrusting her rear out as she bent from the waist in a calendar-girl pose. “—and fan out these magazines in an in-VI-ting array!”

“But the old batteries in a jar?” I folded my arms into my sweatshirt - Oscar to her Felix.

“Just like candy!” 

--100 words

17 comments:

janet said...

Could she come help me when I'm staging the house for sale? Can't say I have batteries, but I'm sure she could find something to put in a bottle. :-)

Love the cherry-red high heels and the calendar-girl pose.

Abraham Gumba said...

Now that's an idea!
:-)

waitingforaname said...

Love the narrators response to the "organizer." Also, love the contrast between the two.

Boomie Bol said...

Nicely done.

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

A fun, well organized little tale. I liked my Oscar to her Felix...I can o relate.

Joanna (Lazuli Portals) said...

I liked this, Cindy - really good characterisation!

I didn't get the Oscar & Felix reference, perhaps a cultural thing (I did go and look it up, though, and now understand!)

I really hope cherry-red shoes lady comes to stay with me - lots to sort and arrange, here!!

Reading Pleasure said...

Very nice. I like the candy allusion

Anonymous said...

Good job of developing real characters in very few words. I can visualize the calendar girl pose. Well done. Ron

Dancingirl said...

Ha! That was fun to read. I can see her!

rich said...

some of that should be written in red ink. ;)

Cindy Marsch said...

Joanna, you must just be too young to know of Oscar and Felix. :-) Janet, I think probably the quirky decorating of this character might not be what the real estate people have in mind. Waiting, thanks for appreciating the difference between the characters. I wasn't sure how to make the narrator--I didn't want a husband, so I tried to make it a roommate with the Oscar/Felix thing.

Thanks for commenting, also, Abraham, Boomie, Rochelle, Reading Pleasure, Anonymous, Dancing, and Rich!

Shirley said...

That lady reminds me of Mrs. Wiggins on the Carol Burnett show. Tight dress that made her bend over while she walked. SO cute.

vbreverb said...

There is something about the relationship of batteries to candy....Good color accent, however.

tedstrutz.com said...

Had to read twice... I can now picture the realtor going thru the house... In fact, I can picture a few I know by your descriptive tale.

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Cindy Marsch said...

Oh, Shirley, that's funny--Mrs. "Huh-WIGgins!" :-) I was thinking a bit cuter than that. And Ted, I didn't have a real estate agent in mind at all, but I can certainly see it, especially after Janet's comment! Thanks for our comment, too VB.

Douglas MacIlroy said...

Dear Cindy,

I love these characters and their at odds world views. Nicely rendered.

Aloha,

Doug